June was the last time I posted anything here, and that's just downright shameful. But it is what it is. The summer months were crazy dealing with health issues, car issues, a crazy social schedule, and then, finally, a lovely beach vacation with my good friend Barra and her family. Getting away from it all was EXACTLY what I needed. I came home refreshed and raring to go. I've started writing a new story, but so far it's really only in the beginning stages. As in, first chapter is all that's been partially written. But it's a start.
The past couple weeks I've been working almost every day on my query letter for Where We Fell. I still need to update my agent list, but I think I'm juuuuuust about ready to start the scary submission process. I believe in this book. Everyone who's read it says my writing has come a long way since the first story- and for the record, I still think that one was good, too. Just needs some more work (and someday I swear I'll go back to it). Thanks to some major help from my sister in law- I think we've emailed back and forth at least 79 times now- here's where my query stands right now:
If only Jane had given Connor the five minutes of her time he’d
begged for, he wouldn’t be lying unresponsive in a hospital bed, stuck between
this world and the next. But Jane had been upset, still raw from the pain he’d
caused her, so instead she’d practically shoved him into the car with someone
who’d had far too much to drink that night.
Feeling desperate and full of guilt, Jane heads for the old well
in the Patterson fields. Town legend says that the ghost who haunts its
crumbling ruin, Gabby King, grants wishes to a rare few she deems worthy of her
help. Jane has always thought the stories of Gabby were just silly fairytales,
and even if she did believe them, she isn’t sure she deserves anything at all.
Yet if a simple wish can save her boyfriend, she’s
willing to try.
To her surprise, Gabby not only exists, but
wants to give Jane the chance Gabby herself never got with her own first love.
She offers to send Jane into the space between; the place, Gabby explains,
where souls go to await their destiny on earth. Connor’s soul is there in a
perfect world created by his mind, and if Jane can’t convince him to leave
he’ll never wake. Gabby warns Jane of the dangers a living soul faces to enter
this realm; she must go back when Gabby calls or she will get trapped there
herself.
However, once in the space between, Jane realizes persuading Connor to leave is not
going to be easy. He's angry, resentful, and has brought all the pain from
that fateful night with him. But Jane will do anything to bring him back, even
if it means trading her life for his.
WHERE WE FELL is a contemporary young adult novel with paranormal
elements, complete at 75,000 words.
So I ask you, dear loyal readers of this blog, what are your thoughts? Does this sound like something you would want to read based solely on the query? Pretend you don't know me. Seriously. I will listen to any suggestions at this point. These are soooo hard to write, and I only have one shot to impress an agent.
I have a lot more to discuss, but I shall save those thoughts for another blog. Hopefully I'll get back to posting on a semi-regularly basis again here soon.
Thought for the day: How can you have a beautiful ending without making beautiful mistakes? (this was from a fortune cookie and I just loved it. I cannot take credit for this thought.)
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